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Group activities or team work help in developing life skills do you agree or disagree?Explain

#group #activities #team #work #life #skills
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group
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 activity or
team
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work
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,
specifically is
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specifically, is
involvment
the act of sharing in the activities of a group
involvement
 of multiple people to achieve a certain goal. People with various skills, talents and specialisations come together to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 a task in a given time. We come across
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 activities on a regular basis, whether it is
at
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in
 office, some sports or even at restaurants and movies. I strongly agree that
team
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work
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 can aid in developing life skills. When humans from different backgrounds unite to
work
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 on a task, they not only expedite the process of task completion, but
also
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 unknowingly teach each other, some or the other skills. Knowledge sharing is an important part of
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team
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
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.
Internet
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The internet
 is a live example of how men and women from various parts of the world come together to share their experiences. They don't physically appear, but through social media share a lot of different things. Sports is another field wherein there are some games which cannot be won unless everyone contributes.
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, the England cricket
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 wouldn't have won the world cup if the bowlers didn't bowl so flawlessly.
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, the batsmen did their job of scoring runs with equal dominance.
Team
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work
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 assists people in learning newer things, and
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this
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 attained wisdom can be applied practically to improve efficiency.
Team
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work
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existsnot
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exists not
 only in humans, but
also
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 in animals, birds, and all kinds of species that strive to survive. Like the trail of ants, who call each other through the use of pheromones, locate the food, and transport it with the help of each others efforts. In the wild, a
group
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 of zebras can survive together. They are safe as long as they are in a herd. But when a lion hunts its
pray
a person who is the aim of an attack (especially a victim of ridicule or exploitation) by some hostile person or influence
prey
, it hunts the one who is separated from the
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. Like the lessons which we learnt in school, in
this
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 case too, unity is strength. Migratory birds, when the onset of winter begins, migrate in groups of their own species. They do so to survive throughout the journey. Some
group
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 activities, like a musical band cannot function without
team
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work
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. The essence of the music is in the harmony of different instruments, synchronized to sound in a melodious manner. Different actors
work
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 together on stage to recreate a scene and each individual contributes his
work
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, by giving his best. When we see movies, or theatre, we see a
group
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 of people who have worked as a
team
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 to deliver the
entertaintment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
.
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Team
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The team
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work
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works
is working
has worked
 not just helps a person to sharpen his own skills, but
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unknowlingly
without knowledge or intention
unknowingly
 introduces a transfer of skills and techniques, from one to another. The same can be made use of, when the person switches from one
team
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 to another.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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