The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The graph illustrates average
carbon
dioxide
emissions
per person from the
year
1967 to 2007 in four different countries.
Overall
, here we see that in
UK
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the
number
of
carbon
emissions
was much more than
any
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in any
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other country. Compare to that
in
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Sweden
, people
were became
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more
carefull
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careful
carefully
about
carbon
emissions
. It is noticeable that in Portugal
carbon
emissions
upsurge
in
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by
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a great amount
of
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number
which was almost 1 metric
tonnes
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tonne
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in 1967 and it increased just above 5 metric
tonnes
in 1997. But it remained steady from the
year
1997 to 2007.
On the other hand
, at first
carbon
emissions
boomed between the
year
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years
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1967 and 1977 in
Sweden
, which began at above 8 metric
tonnes
and it increased about 10 metric
tonnes
.
However
, it declined dramatically from the
year
1977 till the end and it stopped
decreased
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at
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about 5 metric
tonnes
.
Therefore
,
carbon
emissions
were the same in the
year
2007 in Portugal and
Sweden
and their amount was more than 5 metric
tonnes
.
Moreover
,
Sweden
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carbon
emissions
cast crossed Italy in 1987 and their
number
was about 7 metric
tonnes
when they crossed each other.
At
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the end, in
United
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the United
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Kingdom people threw
carbon
dioxide about 11 metric
tonnes
and their
number
was always high throughout the period

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, emissions, year, number, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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