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grandparents play an important role in the upbringing of their grandchildren, do you think it is useful for them to be involved, give your opinion?

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Family is what teaches a person values, wisdom, compassion, modesty and motive in life. Many of our
grandparents
 have helped their grandchildren in one way or another in their upbringing. In my opinion, it is not completely necessary for
grandparents
 to be involved in the upbringing of their grandchildren. In a nuclear family, where all the family share most of the daily necessities together often learn a lot more than a single family. A grandmother’s
love
 and affection
teaches
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 a child to be more humble and compassionate
whereas
 a grandfather’s control and boldness
teaches
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 a child to be strong and honest. Working couples who are not able to be there at home most of the time often ask
the
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grandparents
 to be there in their absence.
For example
, as a
kid
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 I would mostly spend
the
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time with my
grandparents
 as both of my parents were working but because of my
grandparents
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 I learned a lot more about people their nature, respect, morals, culture, tradition, ancestry and many more.
However
, nowadays
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moral value and traditions are not the same as it was before and many
of
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the
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children learn
through
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 their own or
by
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 their social life.
Also
,
grandparents
 are not always having
a
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good health
moreover
, they require proper medical attention and support for themselves
Thus
,
grandparents
love
 their grandchildren as much as they
love
 they
love
 their children, but as they can always provide care and affection but child requires more of his/her
parents
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 presence and
love
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