The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010
The first graph below bar graphs provides information about the population in 5 different years
computer
ownership percentage in term
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while
the second
chart describes the possession of computer
on the basis of education level in two different years 2002 and 2010.
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computers
Overall
, it can be observed from the graph, the popularity of central
processing Correct article usage
the central
unit
increased over the given period. Fix the agreement mistake
units
Similarly
, CPU ownership by literacy rate a
follows a growing trend. It can be deduced from the given information, the percentage of desktops owned by people in all education Correct article usage
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category
in 2010 are higher Fix the agreement mistake
categories
while
compared to 2002.The educational institutes which have Correct word choice
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a
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post graduate
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postgraduate
qualification
had a larger number of computers than other institutions.
In terms of Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
computer
ownership by population, it is
gradually grew from over 45% in 2002 to above 70% in 2010.Unnecessary verb
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Furthermore
, in 2002 the computer
owned by high school
accounted for 10%, Fix the agreement mistake
schools
whereas
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Computer
procession was very high in postgraduate qualification colleges,which accounted above
75% in 2002 Change preposition
for above
while
this
value rose above 90% in 2010.All
other institutes like Change preposition
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college
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computer
procession figure increased significantly in 2010 while
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