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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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History repeats itself. Things that we have done or experienced in the past, have a high probability of coming back into our lives at some point. Not only things or experiences, but
also
 people who were part of our lives in the past, may cross our paths in the present or the future which may have a huge impact on our present
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
. Though we are living in the present, I believe that the past does hold a lot of value. A person who has had a difficult childhood,
for example
, people who have experienced sexual abuse as kids, or maybe physical abuse, may still experience post traumatic stress which lasts for ages. They may still panic when they run across something similar, or witness an identical situation. If their past is known to their guardians or friends, precautionary measures can be taken to avoid the panic-
stiking
sensational in appearance or thrilling in effect
striking
 situation. Another instance is
of
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about
 married couples who hide their past love life from their respective partners. A friend of mine had gone through something very similar. He was dating a girl from college for four years, but unfortunately
could'nt
could not
couldn't
 get married to her, as his family did not accept inter-cast marriage. He ended his relationship and tried to move on in life. After a year or so, his parents found a match for him. When he decided to get married to her, his ex girlfriend turned up and tried to ruin his wedding. But fortunately that did not happen, as he had been transparent about his past relationship with his current partner. I feel, knowing about
ones
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one's
 history gives us, the advantage to foresee what might happen, if an unfavourable situation reoccurs with a loved one. It
also
 gives us the insight, to understand someone better.

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