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Youth crime is increasing rapidly in many countries. Why it is increasing? and what solution can be taken to resolve the problem.

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It is obviously true that the teenagers crime growing up swiftly in many countries around the world. There are several reasons behind
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However
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 to tackle the
problem
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, we can suggest a number of solutions.
Firstly
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, the most important issue of rising youth
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
 is lack of interaction with parents. Nowadays, almost every
parents
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parent
are busy with their job rather than giving
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is busy with their job rather than giving
are busy with their job rather than giving
 time with children.
Therefore
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, children
can not
can not
cannot
 get a chance to discuss their opinion with anyone and do what they want without thinking about the right path. In some cases, parents broke their relationship with each other.
For example
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, in western countries, it is quite common to get
divorce
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divorced
 after few years of marriage and parents do not take any responsibility of
child
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the child
children
. For
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 reason, they have no shelter
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to
 live and they commit crime.
Secondly
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,
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increasing poverty another impacts to enhance the range of negative activity. Because of
shortage
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the shortage
, teenagers mess up with different types of
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
 like: theft, pick pocketing, shoplifting.
On the other hand
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,
although
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 it is not possible to resolve the
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 entirety. By effective solutions, we can enjoy a little control over it. One way is to tackle
problem
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 is family awareness. Parents should be caring about their children. Because, if a child grow up with a proper way, he will never involve with any negative activity. Another way is to take government action. If government construct
rehabilitation club
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a rehabilitation club
 in every division to console teenagers about the negative side and punishment towards crime. In conclusion, the ways I have discussed in my solution part if are materialized in any nation
,
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 the range of the
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 will get a steady decline.

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