Should government make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

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With the advent of globalization, the lifestyle of the people has changed
alot
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a lot
. Earlier, people used to think before doing anything suspicious. But today, the
society
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is becoming spontaneous without
re-thinking
change one's mind
rethinking
the
consequeces
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequences
of their doing. In order to control the situation,
government
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the government
can play a major role in controlling the scenario and lifestyle of the
society
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. There are
plethora
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a plethora
of
intiatives
readiness to embark on bold new ventures
initiatives
that
government
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the government
can take to eradicate the ill practices from the
society
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.
For example
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, youngsters are
hynotized
having your attention fixated as though by a spell
hypnotized
hypnotised
by the drugs unknowingly the consequences of it.
However
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, the
ramifcations
the act of branching out or dividing into branches
ramifications
of the intake of drugs are
fatal but
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fatal, but
they allured by it and it has reached to
epidemic
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the epidemic
. Like, Ministry of Social Justice and Empowerment, Government of India, has introduced a
naional
of or relating to or belonging to a nation or country
national
toll-free helpline number for the drug abuse victims, their family and the
society
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at large.
This
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initiative is helping not only the individual but
also
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his family who is the major sufferer. Young people from the developing countries are indulging themselves
into
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in
crime
becuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
of
lack
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the lack
of employment
oppotunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
. National authorities should intervene so that not only an
individual but
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individual, but
an economy can grow as a whole. Successful
individual leads
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individual, leads
to
growing nation
Suggestion
the growing nation
a growing nation
because they are one who take economy to another level. To conclude, Government and individual can equally help in making the better lifestyle. Productive and constructive decisions will make benefit will everyone.

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