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More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to past. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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In today's world of modernisation we are moving towards a society
that is
 giving preference to careers over their own
familt
a social unit living together
family
 life. People often migrate to different cities in the hope to find better job opportunities and make more money. They are ready to give up the bliss of living with their family and friends for
this
. Through
this
 essay I will explain how living alone might help in a person's character development but is it really worth it? Living alone is indeed difficult. Being a student who had to shift to a new city to attend university I have faced numerous challenges. It's a huge transition from being dependent on everybody around me to relying on my own. From doing daily household chores to being self supportive emotionally, living alone requires
one
 to do it all.
This
 change enables a person to become self reliable and plays an important part in character enhancement.
This
 entire experience is a humbling
one
. There can be numerous disadvantages to living alone as well. Recent studies show that nearly 10% of people who live alone do suffer from various mental health issues including anxiety and depression. Many people resort to bad habits like drugs, smoking and drinking to cope with the boredom that comes with living alone. Another aspect to living alone is coming back from work tired to an empty house with nobody there to welcome you.
This
 creates a feeling of sadness for the person and ultimately leading to a sense of
detatchment
avoiding emotional involvement
detachment
 from
one
's own family and friends. To summarize, if
one
 can face these challenges bravely, living alone can transform a human being for the better.

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