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‘Some people think that changing people’s attitudes to other countries, and culture is an important factor in reducing world poverty. Others, however, feel that the most important method is trade.’

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Only a small percent of the world’s population lives in rich countries. Yet, they own more than 80 percent of the global wealth. Some people claim that we need to change our
attitude
 towards other countries to eradicate poverty from the world. Others feel that increasing trade is the solution. In my opinion, we need a change in
attitude
 as well as a boost in trade. Nations are obsessed with their boundaries. They only want to take care of the people living within their boundaries. If eliminating poverty from the world is the goal, countries and their people have to think beyond their boundaries. People need to realize that everyone irrespective of their nationality, religion or ethnicity belong to
one family – humanity
Suggestion
the one family – humanity
. Rich countries already have a considerable amount of wealth lying unused in their coffers. The moment they start using
this
 wealth for the betterment of humanity, poverty will be a thing of
past
Suggestion
the past
.
This
, of course, requires a change in their
attitude
 towards poor countries and their people. An increase in trade is important too. It is wrong to assume that a nation can progress entirely on financial aid received from other countries. While foreign aid certainly helps in building infrastructure and other facilities, it does not arrive in unlimited amounts.
Therefore rather
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Therefore, rather
 than placing too much reliance on international aid, poor countries should try to boost their domestic and international trades to create jobs and improve their economies. To conclude, rather than leaving the poor countries to their fate, rich countries should come forward to solve the problems plaguing them. People need to realize that irrespective of their skin colour or nationality, they all belong to one species and as
such
 it is their duty to give help where it is required.
This
 is not possible without changing our
attitude
 towards other countries and people.
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