In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of the aging population.

In
this
digitalised world
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due to cutting-edge development in science and technology the average life expectancy rate is
proliferating which
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proliferating, which
will cause problems like overpopulation and over exploitation of natural
resources but
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resources, but
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its impact on the aging population can be mitigate which
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take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
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with the problems which will faced by the individuals
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the
first
and foremost will be
to
being one more than one
two
faced more old age
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state of uncertainty or perplexity especially as requiring a choice between equally unfavorable options
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relating to human society and its members
social
disputes and health hazards and the
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break down, literally or metaphorically
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in my mind is its rise the burden of work for survival in the weakest stage of life On the
otherhand
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other hand
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problem like
overexploitation
of resources for meeting their
undesire
not desired
undesired
end-user
wants put negative impacts on the society
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Moreover
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it will start contaminating the ambience via different type of pollutants
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due to
overpopulation many
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overpopulation, many
of the industries will set up to meet the demand of citizens which directly cause the Pollution. After analysis its negative impact on public and society now, the
next
step is to look towards its initiatives and the most
prodominant
having a quality that thrusts itself into attention
prominent
is to start import of goods so that
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country
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the country
countries
can avoid the overexploitation of resources
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Instead
of
this
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legislative bodies should limit the establishment of industries and usage of
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a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
to
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power to direct or determine
control
the noxious gases which emits in surrounding In compendium
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it is axiomatic that
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rate creating a
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rate, creating a
problem for both individual and
society but
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society, but
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tackled
by the get together efforts of bureaucracy and public
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