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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in suburbs or countryside rather cities To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some are of the opinion that people should be motivated to make their abode in the rural areas rather than the urban places to unravel the challenges of congestion and transportation. I strongly agree with
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 statement because life in the suburbs experience less vehicular gridlock and minimal pollution. Life in the rural parts of the country can be said to experience less traffic jams. Vehicular movements in the villages are not as many as you will find in the towns,
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 there are little or no gridlocks in these parts.
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, a research conducted by the New York traffic police department found out that there were higher traffic congestions in the cities because of the high number of vehicles. The rate of air pollution in the suburbs
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 to none. People who live in the remote parts of the
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country, usually
 experience a pollution free environment,
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 of fewer vehicles and industries that emit carbon monoxide,
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, resulting
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 a healthy environment to live in. To illustrate, a survey carried out in Kenya concluded that 80% of people who live in the villages live a healthier and longer life than their counterparts in the cities. In conclusion, I can safely say that I agree without a doubt that citizens should be encouraged, by any means possible, to live in the villages because
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 does not only reduce their stress level
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 beneficial to their health.
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