Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There are various people
upbringing their
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upbringing, their
children. In Taiwan, many parents think
competition
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is important to make their children becoming successful, but others believe that children who taught cooperate as well as become more useful adults. It is debatable whether the way
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education. Benefit competes can bring a pleasing effect, like increase capability by emulation, but it
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can lead to another result.
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, children may in order to get a good grade
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the exam, so they will not help each other or teach another kid.
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, some children might use the wrong way to win the
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, like cheating. In
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situation, it will have an important impact on children's
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not the main reason that we should teach our children.
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, many people who believe that cooperate has a
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influence on children rather than compete, people believe that solving the problem in teamwork efficiency is better than
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. In school, the teacher always teaches kids to cooperate to finish a report, and children can learn many things in teamwork,
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as they can learn social skills in cooperation.
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their adult's ages, they may be more ready to solve the problem with coworkers. But too much cooperation may cause children to do not have independent thinking skills. To sum up, I think both
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compete
and cooperate have their advantages and negative,
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, I tend to think that taught children to cooperate rather than
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, as each of them helps the children to be more
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and more willing to take
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advise
from others.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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