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Some people should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to state. Do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
As every country collects tax from their people and provides them facilities
,
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but a group of people think that residents should keep all their earnings and should not have an obligation in Paying taxes to the
government
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.I personally disagree with
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 statement and following essay will discuss it in details
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, it is a fact that taxes are used by the
government
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,
for
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in
 developing its nations.
if
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If
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state
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the state
 is providing basic rights to their public because you are giving taxes.
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, when
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collect
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collects
 taxes, In the result, they are responsible to provide quality education and decent Medical Services.
as
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As
 many of the poor people cannot afford private treatments and they go to the
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 hospitals. If people will not pay tax
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 how
state
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 manage it.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, As taxes are allocated for various kinds of essential matters.
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,
government
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 uses the taxes for expanding and maintaining public transportation facilities
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 as expending road and Highways and replacing old public transportation units.
Furthermore
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, construction of Infrastructures by
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 are
also
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 due to taxes.
which
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Which
 are always developed
sign
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signs
 of nations.
while
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While
, without levying, it is impossible for any
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.
Body paragraph 3
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 but not least, no doubt, a lot of budget of countries used
on
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for
 the defence purpose which is always remain
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 priority of any country because robust defence system considered as a power of any country and
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 is a big deal of money. If you are not paying taxes
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 how will
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 ensure the security of his Nation
Conclusion
In conclusion, I personally believe that, without paying tax countries cannot be developed and the people who are claiming that should not pay taxes to the
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, is ridiculous.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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