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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school
In recent years, various educational institutes have made community services an important part of their curriculum program apart from teaching and academics. I totally agree that schools and colleges should include
such
 activities because of the benefits it brings to the students.
Firstly it
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Firstly, it
 helps to develop various life skills
such
 as sharing, discipline and empathy. It helps up to build communication techniques. As the saying says ”If you have the knowledge, let others light their candles in it.” So guiding someone with your knowledge is one of the greatest things.
Secondly
, if you are working in some NGO or
charity
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charitable
 trust, it will help you develop the teamwork quality. Nowadays, teenagers are mainly involved in
such
 activities rather than spending their time on social media. There are various organizations started by the
government
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government, such
such
 as ”Swach Bharat Abhiyan” which means ”Clean India.”
For example
, as in Mumbai, there was a beach cleaning drive ’CLEAN RHE SHORE’ held by college students. Different age group were involved in the activity. Involvement in
such
 activities not only give you moral
skills but
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skills, but
also
 employees you. Various certificates are provided which would get added to resume and valued by universities.
Hence
, it is a process of growing and learning. Community services would help students to become a better person by developing their social skills and help them in their career.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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