The mass media, including television, radio and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas.

The mass media have a powerful influence in shaping our lives. We have come to depend on them for information and entertainment, and in doing so we let them affect important aspects of our lives. The undeniable usefulness of the media in almost instantly providing information about events around the world is largely taken for granted. But in our dependence on the media, we have allowed them to
mold
form in clay, wax, etc
mould
our notions and opinions of events, places, and people. Though few of us probably think about it, our conceptions of, say, our elected
officials
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official
spring from television images and newspaper stories. Most of us will never meet prime ministers or presidents, but anyone who is regularly exposed to the media will have an opinion of them. When it is time to cast our vote, we will make our decision based on how the media
portray
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portrays
the candidates. We are
similarly
swayed by coverage of wars. The media, representing the values of their owners, societies, and governments, tend to report wars with a bias; which is the 'good' side and which the 'bad' is determined for us by reporters, editors and commentators, and sure enough the public begins to form opinions that reflect the coverage they see, hear and read in the major media. The media are
also
influential in the way they facilitate the spread of culture and lifestyle. The so-called 'global youth culture', in which one finds young people around the world displaying a common interest in music, clothing styles, and films, is an example of the media's enormous sway in
this
regard. A popular figure
such
as Michael Jackson would never be so well known were it not for the media's extensive reach into every society on the globe.
Thus I
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would argue that the mass media's influence is certainly great. Indeed, technological advancements,
such
as the Internet,
is bringing
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are bringing
more forms of electronic media to our homes and workplaces. The media's influence will likely grow even stronger over time.
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