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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter Describe the training course you want to do Explain what the company could do to help you Say how the course will be useful for your job

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A couple of days ago, when I was entering into office saw a piece of news on the bulletin board about
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 plan, which will be beneficial for my progress as a medical engineer . Recently, the company has imported new models of dialysis
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 from
German
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Germany
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. I’m unfamiliar with those because have advanced structures and systems. For
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 reason, I really want you to make an arrangement to send me German for learning the new version of
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 clearly. I need to learn
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 language and the association can hold a course
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 it.
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, they should reserve a hotel there and make a coordinate. If I learn completely the dialysis
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 structure can transform
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 knowledge to other staff. Apart from that, when the
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 were damaged, for fixing them it is not necessary to send it back. I can fix them well. I hope that you consider my concerns about my job.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • training course
  • skillset enhancement
  • educational leave
  • sponsorship
  • reimbursement
  • knowledge integration
  • work efficiency
  • career progression
  • continuing education
  • team contribution
  • productivity boost
  • expertise building
  • industry standards
  • hands-on experience
  • networking opportunities
  • cutting-edge techniques
  • best practices
  • return on investment
  • in-house training
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