Some people believe that video games are beneficial to children whereas others believe that it has negative effects.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Constant viewing of television has many impacts either it is
advantage
Suggestion
an advantage
or disadvantage. One of
many reasons
Suggestion
the many reasons
is that by watching documentaries and feature films enable people to know about the western world and its advancement. In other word, these devices provide a sufficient amount of information, instantly, from the all over the world, eventually, people get
good understanding
Suggestion
a good understanding
of current affairs. Another point is taken into account is that when viewers watch any program frequently, especially, violent content which gradually desensitise towards violence in the
society
. Take a recent research report which has shown that there is a positive correlation between watching violent movies and crime activities.
Therefore
, many believe that children be restricted from watching obscene and violent programs. Despite, the above mentioned argument, televisions merely
influnce
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
influenced
the
society
, which means
content
Suggestion
the content
of the stories always unearth from real life experiences than fiction.
This
is just a reflection of current situations in the world. Our
society
is changing and transforming itself, due to
this
, several people think that television programs just try to preserve conventionality and the status quo. Apart from
this
, not only is culture not monolithic and
society
is fragmented
,
Accept space
,
so any television shows cannot influence the entire
society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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