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Families who do not send their children to public schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education
Nowadays
praents
a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian
parents
 prefer to send their children to private schools and pay hefty amount of money as
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fees.
but
Suggestion
But
, to compensate for
this should
Accept comma addition
this, should
 they pay taxes or not
this
 is
matter
Suggestion
a matter
 of conflict. I strongly disagree
to
Suggestion
with
on
this
 point of waiving off tax for parents who are sending their children in private schools.
children
Suggestion
Children
 enrolled in private
schoold
an educational institution
schools
 would be having better exposure to latest technologies, but public schools would only be sufficient to provide
basis
(usually plural) a necessary commodity for which demand is constant
basic
 education.
For instance
, private schools use virtual methods for teaching and children have exposure to
lastest
up to the immediate present; most recent or most up-to-date
latest
 technologies like
ipads
a number of sheets of paper fastened together along one edge
pads
iPod
. In my other viewpoint, its not only education that makes students great,
its
it is
it's
also
qulaity
an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone
quality
 of teachers who are employed by schools.
we
Suggestion
We
 all know, everything good thing comes with a price and to hire good teachers
govt
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
got
 need money and to
reatain
hold back within
retain
return
 them as well.
i
Suggestion
In
n pen
down sayin
Accept comma addition
down, saying
g that irrespective of type of schooling, every parent should pay
ta
Suggestion
taxes
x because
this
 is required to have great teachers and build infrastructure

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