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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Some people recommend students to travel the world for a
year
 before starting university. Others argue a “
gap
year
” is a waste of
time
 and money. I will look at some of the advantages and disadvantages of spending a
gap
year
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 after
school
. Many people think that a
gap
year
 can help a young
person
 to gain some life and
work
experience
 prior to starting university, as well as develop as a
person
. For a young
person
,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 provides an opportunity to broaden their horizons and learn about different countries and cultures. Spending some
time
 in a country while working
also
 makes for a less superficial encounter than only being there as a tourist.
Besides
,
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 can gain
work
experience
 and potentially improve their foreign language skills.
This
experience
 can be an important advantage in a more
international
throughout the world
internationally
 oriented economy.
Additionally
, a “
gap
year
” can aid a
person
 in becoming more independent and grown up, as it will require some organization skills and the ability to manage their finances. It can
also
 be argued that right after
school
 is a good
time
 in life to see the world as most young people do not have any family and professional obligations yet.
However
, there are valid concerns whether the
time
 and money for a
gap
year
 are well spent
.
Accept space
.
 Probably the most serious problem about a
gap
year
 is its impact on future academic performance; young people taking a
gap
year
 may fall behind their peers or lose the motivation to study altogether.
Moreover
,
school
 leavers are generally likely to end up with unskilled jobs abroad that barely cover their expenses, especially if they do not have advanced knowledge of the foreign language used in a country.
Therefore
, the
work
experience
 gained may not be very relevant to a
person
's career later and the
work
 might not offer a lot of opportunity to practice a foreign language. From a more practical point of
view it
Accept comma addition
view, it
 is
also
 worth considering that not everyone feels comfortable living in a camper van, tent or hostel for months. In conclusion, I think
time
 is a valuable resource at any age. There are a number of good alternatives to taking a
gap
year
 immediately after
school
: studying abroad, interning or working in a foreign country once you have completed studying. These alternatives later in a
person
’s career might be a more focused approach that offers better
work
 opportunities, and ultimately, may prove a better
experience
 than a
gap
year
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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