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For many, shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others. People, however, in the past mostly visited those when necessary. To what extent do you think this is a negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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A considerable number of people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
 that large shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 are good for
meetups
Suggestion
Meetups
meet ups
 and for spending spare time.
However
, historically the trend was to go there only when required. In my opinion,
this
 is not an adverse trend.
This
 essay shall cover reasons to show that
this
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is not bad.
Firstly
, grand malls
are
Suggestion
is
 well developed keeping all security aspects in mind. They have camera systems installed, security
check points
a place (as at a frontier) where travellers are stopped for inspection and clearance
checkpoints
, guards patrolling making it a safe place for everyone.
For instance
, walk down the road with your friends, or sitting in the park with family exposes as to risk of street crimes like snatching and
harrasment
a feeling of intense annoyance caused by being tormented
harassment
. Central
survillence
close observation of a person or group (usually by the police)
surveillance
 systems in these shopping hubs make it less liking for
such
 incidents to occur.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
, shopping malls have a variety of stores under the same
roof allowing
Accept comma addition
roof, allowing
 you to have a whole experience under one roof. You can plan your time off work according to your will without having to go different places.
For example
, you can guy grocery, grab a sandwich, watch a movie and buy your
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 book all at once! In conclusion, I would reinforce that
this
 change in the society is a good one. People have been for long seeking secure places to spend their time with friends and family and
such
 places provide just that.

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