More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Obesity in children is a severe problem across the globe. It is more prevalent in the developed countries though.
This
essay tries to examine the major reasons behind
this
and the effects it could have.
Firstly
, unhealthy eating habits in
first
world nations is a major cause. Families in these places rely heavily on packaged and fast
food
. They have access to it and don't have the time to cook healthy. In countries like the USA,
for example
, people carrying a
take-away
Suggestion
takeaway
while returning from work is a common sight.
This
food
is never healthy, especially for growing children. Another reason behind
this
trend is the sedentary lifestyle they have. Particularly, after the onset of technology, young people barely indulge in outdoor activities. Developing nations,
for instance
, can't afford a television or mobile phone in every house and kids there go out and play which is a form of workout.
On the other hand
, kids in the richer countries rely on a 6-inch screen for socializing and entertainment, thereby minimizing physical activities.
This
combination of bad
food
and a lack of exercise is what causes obesity in large nations. Overweight,
however is
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however, is
only the tip of the iceberg. One of the major effects of it is a variety of other diseases. Obesity exposes children to ailments like diabetes and
cholestrol
an animal sterol that is normally synthesized by the liver; the most abundant steroid in animal tissues
cholesterol
at a very early age. There are numerous cases of people having
heart attack
Suggestion
a heart attack
heart attacks
at 18 and 19 years of age. Statistically, a majority of them are obese.
Secondly
, it has severe mental and emotional impact on kids. Being overweight from a very early age has considerable effect on the self confidence, which
then
multiplies into other issues which include depression, anxiety etc. The effects of weight
is
Suggestion
are
hence
both physical as well as mental in nature. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, unhealthy
food
habits and a lazy lifestyle is what leads to
overweight which
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overweight, which
in turn causes a plethora of other health-related and emotional issues.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • processed foods
  • fast food culture
  • screen time
  • metabolic disorders
  • healthcare expenditure
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative strategies
  • nutritional education
  • public health policy
  • body mass index (BMI)
  • emotional well-being
  • stigmatization
  • exercise regimen
  • eating habits
  • junk food
  • socioeconomic factors
  • health literacy
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