Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there is more advantage to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

One of the most conspicuous trend of
today
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today's
todays
era is the living in independent
house but
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house, but
same
time many
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time, many
persons believe that they are more benefits to stay in condos.
They
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Their
are several advantages staying in a own house rather to stay in
apartment
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the apartment
an apartment
. They are myriad of reasons which will
further
elaborate
this
argument but
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argument, but
the most preponderant stem is
comfortness
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comforted
comforts
comforting
,
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,
In own
house having
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house, having
lot
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a lot
lots
of enjoyment in different ways like everyone having own bedroom
,
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,
lot of free space in dining and kitchen area and same time kids can play in their lawn without any issue, on top of that no extra charges for parking and water bills.
In addition
, Value of the land, at present market several people investing money in real estate
therfore
(in formal usage, especially legal usage) for that or for it
therefor
therefore
automatically the
familyhouse
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family house
value increasing a lot and it's useful to future generations.
For Instance
, As per the recent survey in many countries
,
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,
40% people are
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
entrusted
to stay in their own
bunglow
a small house with a single story
bungalow
and the prices are increasing every year.
On the other hand
, several people are
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
entrusted
to stay in
apartments but
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apartments, but
they are more drawbacks to living there.
Firstly
and foremost is
kids
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the kids
can't play games in
apartment
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the apartment
due to several conditions from other flat owners
therefore
they have only one
entertinement
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
is television or
videogames
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video games
hence
it's badly effected to the family.
Secondly
,
safety
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the safety
of the building
,
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,
most of the suites are very small and they don't have any proper fire safety
rules
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rules, therefore
therefore
it's
dangours
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
dangers
to living there apart from that flat
diprecration
a decrease in price or value
depreciation
value is year by year decreasing.
For Example
, In CNN research who ever is living in apartments having more health issue due to the closed environment without any proper air transfer system. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned
arguments it
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arguments, it
can be concluded that
,
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,
majority of
public
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the public
is
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
to stay in their villa rather than to
conjusted apartment
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a congested apartment
congested apartment
because they have more comforts in many ways like enjoyment and family gatherings and yearly the property value will increase.
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