The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates data about, how many
incidents
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and
injuries
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were recorded per 100 million passengers who travelled by five different means of transportation in the year 2002.
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, Demand Response contributed
for
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to
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the highest number of
incidents
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and
injuries
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,
while
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Commuter
rail
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recorded very low accidents and wounds. In Detail, as regards Demand Response, there were over 250
incidents
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recorded, which is
highest
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the highest
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among all other transportation systems. It
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accounted for nearly 175
injuries
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,
this
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figure is
also
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the highest among other means. Both Light
rail
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and Bus
responsible
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for almost 75 accidents each, but the
injuries
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recorded by the Bus
incidents
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are double the value of Light
rail
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. Heavy
rail
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mishaps accounted for 50,
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the number of
injuries
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is nearly
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the same
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as that of Light
rail
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with just under 50. The lowest
incidents
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and
injuries
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of all the transportation types are recorded by Commuter
rail
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with just under 25 mishaps and wounds respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, rail with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Passenger Miles Travelled (PMT)
  • incidents per 100 million PMT
  • injuries per 100 million PMT
  • transportation type
  • comparative measures
  • statistical analysis
  • proportionate level
  • anomalous data
  • discrepancies in safety figures
  • severity of incidents
  • frequency of occurrences
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