Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

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Children

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Children's

Child

Child's

health

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are detoriating

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is deteriorating

are deteriorating

due to the fatness around the world.

Obesity

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is pretty alarming through the world

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even in the well-developed western countries. There are many reasons associated with the

obesity

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, let us examine few problems and its solutions. It is likely that the main reason for

obesity

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thee

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the

there

changing

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

around the world. The sophistication and the advancement in technology has

greater negative impact

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a greater negative impact

on the

health

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than it was thought it would be. These

advancement

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advancements

in technology comes at a greater impact on the heath due to lack of laziness and reduced physical activity in both home and office

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With

office people continuously sit and work before the computer

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and

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health

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. Now a day’s even

children

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child

prefer

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prefers

sitting at home and playing video games rather than playing games

outdoor

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outdoors

, and they love to chat on their internet with their friends and seeing television. These changes

are showing

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are shown

adverse effect

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an adverse effect

adverse effects

health

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, While seeing

television they

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television, they

eat unhealthy

food

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cheese burgers

a hamburger with melted cheese on it

cheeseburgers

, fried chips, aerated drinks which is loaded with sugar etc.

these

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These

foods are loaded with unwanted fat and calorie. These kind of

food

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, not only make the kids

fat but

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fat, but

also

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diseases

realted

being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics

obesity

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like gar, cardiac arrest ay a very young age.

Sambru

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a guy of age 13 died of cardiac arrest

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last march

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the last march

and it was even published in the Hindu.

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is the effect of

obesity

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. In my opinion

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parents and teacher should take

these step

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these steps

seriously and as a matter of urgency should keep an eye on the children

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For

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example parents

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example, parents

should keep an eye on what the child is eating and should restrict the junk

food

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and give healthy

food

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Teacher

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The teacher

should educate the children

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about

the impact of junk

food

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and sedentary lifestyle, the government can ban these unhealthy

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food

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foods

for the welfare of the country In conclusion all countries are falling a prey to these unhealthy

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food

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foods

, so let’s stop

this

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menace and prevent these unhealthy practices for the welfare of the society by the preventive steps mentioned above

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only a healthy society will become a healthy country later.

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Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

Fully explain your ideas

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter -describe the problem.

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arys and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or disgree?

Some people believe that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, say that life for the elderly nowadays is much better than it was in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more material and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal.