Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.
Children
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Children's
Child
Child's
health
are detoriating
due to the fatness around the world. Suggestion
is deteriorating
are deteriorating
Obesity
is pretty alarming through the world ,
even in the well-developed western countries. There are many reasons associated with the Accept space
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obesity
, let us examine few problems and its solutions.
It is likely that the main reason for obesity
is thee
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the
there
life style
around the world. The sophistication and the advancement in technology has a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
greater negative impact
on the Suggestion
a greater negative impact
health
than it was thought it would be. These advancement
in technology comes at a greater impact on the heath due to lack of laziness and reduced physical activity in both home and officeSuggestion
advancements
.
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in
office people continuously sit and work before the computer Suggestion
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and
in
health
. Now a day’s even children
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child
prefer
sitting at home and playing video games rather than playing games Suggestion
prefers
outdoor
, and they love to chat on their internet with their friends and seeing television.
These changes Suggestion
outdoors
are showing
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are shown
adverse effect
on Suggestion
an adverse effect
adverse effects
health
, While seeing television they
eat unhealthy Accept comma addition
television, they
food
like cheese burgers
, fried chips, aerated drinks which is loaded with sugar etc. a hamburger with melted cheese on it
cheeseburgers
these
foods are loaded with unwanted fat and calorie. These kind of Suggestion
These
food
, not only make the kids fat but
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fat, but
also
diseases realted
to being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
obesity
like gar, cardiac arrest ay a very young age. Sambru
a guy of age 13 died of cardiac arrest last march
and it was even published in the Hindu. Suggestion
the last march
Such
is the effect of obesity
.
In my opinion ,
parents and teacher should take Accept space
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these step
seriously and as a matter of urgency should keep an eye on the childrenSuggestion
these steps
.
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For
example parents
should keep an eye on what the child is eating and should restrict the junk Accept comma addition
example, parents
food
and give healthy food
. Teacher
should educate the children Suggestion
The teacher
on
the impact of junk Suggestion
about
food
,
and sedentary lifestyle, the government can ban these unhealthy Accept space
,
food
for the welfare of the country
In conclusion all countries are falling a prey to these unhealthy Suggestion
foods
food
, so let’s stop Suggestion
foods
this
menace and prevent these unhealthy practices for the welfare of the society by the preventive steps mentioned above ,
only a healthy society will become a healthy country later.Accept space
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