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Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

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Children
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Children's
Child
Child's
health
are detoriating
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is deteriorating
are deteriorating
 due to the fatness around the world.
Obesity
 is pretty alarming through the world
,
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,
 even in the well-developed western countries. There are many reasons associated with the
obesity
, let us examine few problems and its solutions. It is likely that the main reason for
obesity
 is
thee
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the
there
 changing
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 around the world. The sophistication and the advancement in technology has
greater negative impact
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a greater negative impact
 on the
health
 than it was thought it would be. These
advancement
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advancements
 in technology comes at a greater impact on the heath due to lack of laziness and reduced physical activity in both home and office
.
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.
in
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With
In
 office people continuously sit and work before the computer
n
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
in
=and damage their
health
. Now a day’s even
children
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child
prefer
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prefers
 sitting at home and playing video games rather than playing games
outdoor
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outdoors
, and they love to chat on their internet with their friends and seeing television. These changes
are showing
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are shown
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
adverse effects
 on
health
, While seeing
television they
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television, they
 eat unhealthy
food
 like
cheese burgers
a hamburger with melted cheese on it
cheeseburgers
, fried chips, aerated drinks which is loaded with sugar etc.
these
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These
 foods are loaded with unwanted fat and calorie. These kind of
food
, not only make the kids
fat but
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fat, but
also
 diseases
realted
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
 to
obesity
 like gar, cardiac arrest ay a very young age.
Sambru
 a guy of age 13 died of cardiac arrest
last march
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the last march
 and it was even published in the Hindu.
Such
 is the effect of
obesity
. In my opinion
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,
 parents and teacher should take
these step
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these steps
 seriously and as a matter of urgency should keep an eye on the children
.
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.
For
example parents
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example, parents
 should keep an eye on what the child is eating and should restrict the junk
food
 and give healthy
food
.
Teacher
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The teacher
 should educate the children
on
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about
 the impact of junk
food
,
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,
and sedentary lifestyle, the government can ban these unhealthy
food
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foods
 for the welfare of the country In conclusion all countries are falling a prey to these unhealthy
food
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foods
, so let’s stop
this
 menace and prevent these unhealthy practices for the welfare of the society by the preventive steps mentioned above
,
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,
 only a healthy society will become a healthy country later.
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