Some people says that, history is one of the most important school subject. other people think, in todays world, subject like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion

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Two

school

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schools

of thought are found where one group argued about the importance of

history

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most important subject whereas

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the most important subject, whereas

the most important subject whereas

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last school

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the last school

of thought comprises of

science

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and technology being

most important one

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the more important one

more important one

than other subject like

history

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History

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enables us to know about the past and culture around all over the world which facilitates to

broadened

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broaden

our mind and knowledge.

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; when a student learn about the past

history

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of ‘Baro Bhuiyan’(Twelve kings) of Bengal

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they will certainly be interested to preserve the past

history

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and present them in broader audience.

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will not only improves the

self-respect but

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self-respect, but

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helps them to be curious about other’s

people

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peoples'

person's

peoples

history

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as a

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result they

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result, they

will be more respectful about others culture and

history

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On the other hand

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, in current ages,

science

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and technology have an obvious impact towards society.

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; if the student

only learn

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only learns

history

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this

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subject were given too much importance over

science

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, they will fail to cope up with the modern world and their job opportunity will be shrunken. Current modern days

demands

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demand

more scientific innovation and tech related research and

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if we fail to supply enough graduate, the whole

filed

catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket

field

will be hollow. So being, advocating for

science

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, I would say,

ofcourse

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of course

, people need to learn about

history

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and there should be

minimum mandatory

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a minimum mandatory history course

history

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course

to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits

too

enlightened about

past

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the past

but we should give more focus on

science

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and technology.

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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239 words

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Some people says that, history is one of the most important school subject. other people think, in todays world, subject like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, owning a home is more important rather than renting one. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smart phone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?