Some people says that, history is one of the most important school subject. other people think, in todays world, subject like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion

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Two

school

Suggestion

schools

of thought are found where one group argued about the importance of

history

most important subject whereas

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the most important subject, whereas

the most important subject whereas

last school

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the last school

of thought comprises of

science

and technology being

most important one

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the more important one

more important one

than other subject like

history

History

enables us to know about the past and culture around all over the world which facilitates to

broadened

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broaden

our mind and knowledge.

For example

; when a student learn about the past

history

of ‘Baro Bhuiyan’(Twelve kings) of Bengal

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they will certainly be interested to preserve the past

history

and present them in broader audience.

This

will not only improves the

self-respect but

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self-respect, but

also

helps them to be curious about other’s

people

Suggestion

peoples'

person's

peoples

history

as a

result they

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result, they

will be more respectful about others culture and

history

On the other hand

, in current ages,

science

and technology have an obvious impact towards society.

For example

; if the student

only learn

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only learns

history

this

subject were given too much importance over

science

, they will fail to cope up with the modern world and their job opportunity will be shrunken. Current modern days

demands

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demand

more scientific innovation and tech related research and

Accept space

if we fail to supply enough graduate, the whole

filed

catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket

field

will be hollow. So being, advocating for

science

, I would say,

ofcourse

Suggestion

of course

, people need to learn about

history

and there should be

minimum mandatory

Suggestion

a minimum mandatory history course

history

course

to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits

too

enlightened about

past

Suggestion

the past

but we should give more focus on

science

and technology.

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