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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Citizens are the wealth of any country and
health
 is the main concern for all human beings. Most of the developed countries offer free medical coverage for their permanent residents. But
this
 free facility is still not viable for many counties and had affected their population in a drastic way. I agree that it should be given free to all human beings and
its
it is
it's
 a basic human right as well. On one hand, the primary
health
 care may be free for all people, but the premier facilities are still a distant dream for
majority
Suggestion
the majority
 of the civilization due to the cost factor associated with it. In
this
 scenario, governments should introduce subsidized packages and family coverage offers so that as the number of
enrollments
the act of enrolling
enrolments
 for covering
wide set
Suggestion
a wide set
 of ailments and the number of family members enrolled increases, they will get some discounts. Free coverage is a must for any types of child delivery and for treatments
such
 as cancer and AIDS.
On the other hand
, the high costly equipment and treatments may not be available in all parts of the country. The responsible authorities and local councils should work to get the funding from central governments to establish all the basic medical machinery and expertise at their local hospitals as well. They should
also
 run a campaign to insist their people to go for
health
 checkups regularly and there should be a
health
 checkup routine for each age category and for different types of
health
 conditions. In conclusion, the World
Health
 Organization and United Nations Organization
plays
Suggestion
play
 a vital role in the implementation of
this
 plan world wide. Many poor countries are lacking the financial stability to support their citizens and even the basic infrastructure too. So, by cooperatively implementing the free healthcare support across
globe
Suggestion
the globe
 is the need of the hour and
thus
 everyone in
this
 world could get the benefits.
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