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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #car
Someone has rightly said that – “The
car
 has become an article of dress without which we feel uncertain, unclad, and incomplete”. In my opinion, the advantages of the
car
 outstrip its disadvantages. There are many advantages of
car
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the car
. The most important advantage is that it has given people freedom of movement. The ease of
transportation which
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transportation, which
 a
car
 brings is more than any other form of transportation.
For instance
, you can go from destination to destination and no time is wasted waiting for the bus or train.
Therefore
, time and distance are not a barrier
any more
at the present or from now on; usually used with a negative
anymore
. What is more, families can go out together.
This
 becomes especially helpful when there are elderly or the disabled and sick members in the family.
Furthermore
, the automobile industry provides jobs to millions of workers. Filling stations, restaurants, and other businesses that serve automobile
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
travels
 are of major importance to a country’s economy.
In addition
, many developing nations have begun making automobiles to boost their economy.
That is
 why India has promoted many automobile manufacturing industries
such
 as Tata and Mahindra.
On the other hand
 the disadvantages of the
car
 cannot be overlooked. The increase in pollution, traffic jams and accidents are the natural
sequelae
something that follows something else
sequel
 to the burgeoning population of cars.
Moreover
, our overdependence on cars can lead to decrease in practices
such
 as walking and cycling and
this
 has led to a number of diseases
such
 as obesity. On balance, the advantages to people’s lives and the economic impact created by the
car
 definitely outweigh the disadvantages.
However
, we must know when and how-much to use the
car
 so that we can minimize the demerits to some extent.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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