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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do. 1:13-2:13 125

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Dear Sir, I am writing to cite my concern over the recent cancellation of
work
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 placement programme which was earlier part of
Business
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the Business
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 English course. I am currently studying Business English
in
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 your school. One of the major reasons for opting for
this
 field was its placement programme.
However
, I was informed in our
last
 faculty meeting that
this
programm
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programme
program
 has been cancelled. I would like to draw your attention to the grave issues associated with
cancellation
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 of
this
well designed
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 program.
This
 program was planned to equip students with practical experience through placements in esteemed organizations.
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The absence
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 of
such
 initiatives will result in breeding a generation of students devoid of market exposure. Upon inquiring from
administration
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the administration
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office
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 about the reason
of
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this
 cancellation, I was informed that student attendance was marginal. To address
this
 worrying problem, I would request you to keep the program open for students desirous of availing
such
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 opportunities.
This
 step will not only ensure that attendance is up to the mark but will
also
 give us a chance to explore the market trends and polish our skills by learning from the industry experts. Your kind consideration over
this
 important matter will be highly appreciated. Yours sincerely, XYZ

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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