You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do. 1:13-2:13 125

Dear Sir, I am writing to cite my concern over the recent cancellation of
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placement programme which was earlier part of
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the Business

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English course. I am currently studying Business English
in
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your school. One of the major reasons for opting for
this
field was its placement programme.
However
, I was informed in our
last
faculty meeting that
this
programm
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programme
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has been cancelled. I would like to draw your attention to the grave issues associated with
cancellation
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the cancellation

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of
this
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program.
This
program was planned to equip students with practical experience through placements in esteemed organizations.
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of
such
initiatives will result in breeding a generation of students devoid of market exposure. Upon inquiring from
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office
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about the reason
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this
cancellation, I was informed that student attendance was marginal. To address
this
worrying problem, I would request you to keep the program open for students desirous of availing
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opportunities.
This
step will not only ensure that attendance is up to the mark but will
also
give us a chance to explore the market trends and polish our skills by learning from the industry experts. Your kind consideration over
this
important matter will be highly appreciated. Yours sincerely, XYZ

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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • therefore
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