You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do. 1:13-2:13 125

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Dear Sir, I am writing to cite my concern over the recent cancellation of

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placement programme which was earlier part of

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the Business

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English course. I am currently studying Business English

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your school. One of the major reasons for opting for

this

field was its placement programme.

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, I was informed in our

last

faculty meeting that

this

programm

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has been cancelled. I would like to draw your attention to the grave issues associated with

cancellation

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this

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program.

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program was planned to equip students with practical experience through placements in esteemed organizations.

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such

initiatives will result in breeding a generation of students devoid of market exposure. Upon inquiring from

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office

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about the reason

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cancellation, I was informed that student attendance was marginal. To address

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worrying problem, I would request you to keep the program open for students desirous of availing

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of such

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opportunities.

This

step will not only ensure that attendance is up to the mark but will

also

give us a chance to explore the market trends and polish our skills by learning from the industry experts. Your kind consideration over

this

important matter will be highly appreciated. Yours sincerely, XYZ

Wed Oct 13 2021

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