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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In the present era, people prefer home-based
work
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 due to the availability of modern technology. In
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 essay, I will argue that
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 advancement has more negative impacts than positive. One advantage of
job
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the job
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 the place of residence is the freedom it provides. Workers have more control
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 time and they can comfortably organise their job activity around their home life as they can stop or start
work
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 whenever they want.
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, if they have children, they can easily take them and pick them up from school.
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, they can easily undertake any other task related to their personal life, like emergency in
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the family
 or shopping. Overall by highlighting the merits, I conclude that people can independently do their job-related
work
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 as well as their personal chores
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 managing time on their own. Despite these positive factors, there
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 a plethora of the disadvantages, in which
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 and foremost is loneliness. When people are at
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, they are always surrounded by others, but
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in
 his own area, an employee is likely to be all alone most of the time and unable to establish a social circle to relax himself from his
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robot
 life.
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 may lead to feelings of sadness and lonesomeness, which
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 tends to develop stress and depression. Another drawback is the fact that one may have less influence in the company. It is often the case that if unforeseen situation or important decisions arise on any unexpected issues in
company
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the company
, if an employee is not there, others may have to step in. If
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 occurs on a regular basis, the contribution of
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the employee
employees
an employee
, may decline, resulting a higher probability of not getting promoted. On the whole,
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 there are both merits and demerits of job running from home with the use of enhanced technology, I must conclude that there are more negative impacts.
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, employees should consider carefully whether working from his living area is the best choice or not.
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