What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving school at 16 or 18 to work instead of going to university?

#school #work #university

Nowdays

Suggestion

Nowadays

, the

atomosphere

a particular environment or surrounding influence

atmosphere

is getting more and more popular in China, which some teenager at 16 or 18 prefer to leave school to work

instead

of going to university. What is

reason

Suggestion

the reason

of it? Maybe some young people leave school to get a job at once, which begin a pleasant live

withought

in absence of

without

parerent’s

a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian

parents

parers

helping. No matter how the entire family or individual will be benefit from

this

, it is a specified

advanges

the quality of having a superior or more favorable position

advantages

. But, the disadvantages

Suggestion

are

also

clear, that’s to say if you have

choince

Suggestion

a chance

chance

the chance

to work after leaving school you would lose the opportunity to promote studying which

casued

give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally

caused

case

you

development

Suggestion

develop

in the future. In my view what on earth to go to work or to study at university, it

is depended

Suggestion

depends

on many factors

such

as your

intrestins

the part of the alimentary canal between the stomach and the anus

intestines

family suggestion economy conditions, and so on. As far as I am concerned with it, I will choice to study continually which widen atomosphere to me

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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving school at 16 or 18 to work instead of going to university?

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Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, introduce yourself say why are you interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc. Write at least 150 words.

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in some countries, the number of shootings increase because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackle?