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Some people think that the government should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. What do you think?

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It is true that people have various different views about the funding for creative artists. While some people deny with the idea of government support for artists, personally, I completely agree that money for
art
 projects should come from
both of governments
Suggestion
both governments
 and other sources. On the one hand, some people believe that promoting and preserving
art
,
hence
, funding artists with suitable funds should be the part of the government
policies
Suggestion
policy
 and I agree.
In other words
, artists
such
 as musician, dancers, and so on require apposite support in order to improve their artistic skills and continue practicing their careers.
Moreover
,
art
 and culture are moral value of the society, so that, by the way giving and helping artists with fundamental facilities is rational.
For example
, there are several singers and actors who have devoted one’s whole life for the public and earned global recognition.
On the other hand
, a variety of people supported that it is much
more better
Suggestion
better
 to put the focus on public facilities
such
 as
school
Suggestion
schools
a school
, parks, and so on rather than giving money for artists and their work. Another reason is that intangible value
such
 as poetry, folk song is
losing
Suggestion
lost
 gradually because young generation have inclined to earn money suddenly.
As a result
, maintaining and protecting the
art
 is the responsibility of the whole community. To sum up,
although
 many views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better for the government to support help at the right times.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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