The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health. To what extent do you agree with these views? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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developing
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kids'
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issues
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a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
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a young person of either sex
youngsters
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encourages
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accept as true; take to be true
believe
hat parents are the cause of over obese of their kids.
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follows
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at home but his kids are ov
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, kids spend more time with their friends mo
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more than
more then
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food outlets
as more impact in ki
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kids'
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the US
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it is evident that parents have no impact in
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on
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kids'
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the discipline
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become worse or disintegrate
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children's
child
child's
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