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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unstaisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situtations.

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With the new developments all over the world, the competition on several subjects is
started
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starting
to begin
,
such
 as a good job or goals due to
populations
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population
population's
 growth.
Therefore
, achieving a goal is
started
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starting
 to
began
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begin
 harder for people compare to the past. So, people are
started
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starting
 to discuss what a
person
 should do when he
/
she has a bad
situation
 like an unsatisfactory job or
shorage
the property of being an amount by which something is less than expected or required
shortage
 of money. Some people believe that the best thing for people who deal with a bad
situation
 is that accepting it and move on, whereas some people, including me, think that we should not agree with a bad
situation
 and try to change it for being happy long or short term. From my perspective, we have limited time before we die, and we will live only ones. It cannot be acceptable to live a
life
 that we are not happy, or we will not be satisfied. Some people say that people can be satisfied if he
/
she accepts the lousy
situation
;
however
, from my view, even someone feels him
/
her like a happy
person
, he or she will be unhappy in a long-term. In one day, for sure, he or she will be regret
from not
Accept comma addition
from, not
 to fight with the unfortunate
situation
. So, a
person
 should not think as an opinion that I need to accept the lousy job because it is all I can do now. If I need to try to achieve better, I can be in the worst
scenery
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenario
.
However
,
this
person
also
 should think about his
/
her future. What he
/
she will
fell
undergo an emotional sensation or be in a particular state of mind
feel
 after 10-15 years? I clearly believe that
person
 will regret because he
/
she did not combat it, they did not do what they liked. So, people should not accept a bad
situation
 and battle with it for their benefit.
On the other hand
, other people believe that getting out
from
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of
 a bad
situation
 is hard in current
life
 conditions.
Therefore
, accepting and living with that
situation
 is the most logical way to survive.
However
, as mentioned above, what is the logic of
life
 mainly? Is it about earning money or living in good condition as economical? For me, it is not about money; it is about patience; it is about what do you want to do in your
life
. So, accepting a bad
situation
 due to combatting with it hard,
can not
can not
cannot
 be a good deal for me.
As a result
, when people in a bad
situation
, some people believe that they should accept it and continue their
life
 due to changing
this
 unfortunate
situation
 is hard in the current world.
In contrast
, other people, including me, think that it is not vital that it is hard or easy. The important thing is that we are living one time, and we need to
combat
compete for something; engage in a contest; measure oneself against others
compete
 with bad situations to
began
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begin
 happy, even it seems an impossible mission.

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