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Some people prefer to buy local products while other prefer international products. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #products
Obviously, there are many reasons why the world population is increasing at an alarming rate. One possible factor is that people do not have proper awareness regarding birth control measures because of illiteracy and certain religious concepts. Due to
this
, both man and woman who do not take any measures to either space between pregnancies or getting pregnant, which eventually, resulting in many unwanted pregnancies. Another point is taken into account is that, since health sectors have been advanced,
this
 increases the longevity of the mankind to a great extent.
Thus
, it is clear that how population is exploding day by day.
However
,
this
 is a serious problem which can be effectively resolved by adapting certain strategies and steps.
Firstly
, the government requires to initiate programmes which educates the public about the consequences of uncontrolled level of the population growth.
Similarly
, the government need to make a national level policy which should include how many children could have a couple. If anyone breaks the law, must be severely punished by charging heavy penalties and imprisonment. Apart from
this
, unwanted pregnancies should be terminated: teenage pregnancies, unborn baby with congenital disorders, and couples with more than two children, but it is essential to ensure that it should be carried out within the 8 weeks of pregnancy
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • durability
  • sustainability
  • longevity
  • affordability
  • consumerism
  • waste
  • environmental impact
  • value for money
  • customer satisfaction
  • brand loyalty
  • consumption
  • economic growth
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