Some people believe that young people should spend their time with family, rather than go to entertainment activities outsides the house. Some disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

This
is one of the common matter discussed among people. The youth
prefere
make ready or suitable or equip in advance for a particular purpose or for some use, event, etc
prepare
for going out with
friend
Suggestion
friends
a friend
and have
fun
with them. They don't find spending
time
with family will give any kind of entertainment. But in the other hand parents want their kids
next
to them always. The new generation
are
Suggestion
is
more interested to spend
time
with their friends because they find
thats
Suggestion
that's
more important and
fun
. Spending
time
with friends will give them more
plesure
a fundamental feeling that is hard to define but that people desire to experience
pleasure
in life. Young people find joy and happiness with their friends. The main point is,
wherther
introduces two alternatives
whether
the aged people can do the same things what they do with their friends?
For example
, for parents it not possible to go for
bike ride
Suggestion
a bike ride
, have
fun
talks, etc.
It
Suggestion
It's
not possible.
Eventhough
Suggestion
Even though
childern
a young person of either sex
children
spend
time
with family, they will be some limits. The youth enjoy more with their friends.
Thats
Suggestion
That's
more entertaining.
However
, spend
time
with family is
also
great. Sitting with your mom, dad and brother make a great experience. Family is
also
equally important and spending
time
with them
also
make more
fun
. Talking about your old memories and laughing, having food with everyone, going for family function meeting all the relatives
also
make
sence
a general conscious awareness
sense
.
sitting
(photography) the act of assuming a certain position (as for a photograph or portrait)
Sitting
and watching comedy
moives
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
moves
movies
movers
in your is the greatest experience what
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
had. For
intance
an occurrence of something
instance
, when
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
sit
home i
Accept comma addition
home, I
home I
won't get a minute to do anything because my mom, dad and brother will be behind me saying some or other things.
Tto
Suggestion
To
Tito
keep their kids with
them
of them or themselves
their
parents would crack jokes and
its
it is
it's
a great
feel
Suggestion
feeling
. To conclude,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think both hanging out with friends and family is
equal
Suggestion
equally
fun
. Both have its
on
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
own
place. With friends we get to know about
world
Suggestion
the world
and
people but
Accept comma addition
people, but
with
parents we
Accept comma addition
parents, we
would come to know about real love.
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