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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
In the recent years, there has been
drastic rise
Suggestion
a drastic rise
 in the number of students taking up technology related courses at
unversities
the body of faculty and students at a university
universities
. There are people who believe that students should only focus on courses related to technology as it would help them with their career.
However
, there are others who believe
its
it is
it's
 important for students to pick up courses based on their interest areas.
This
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will discuss both sides of the argument and put forth my points supporting the latter view. Technological advancements in the recent years have given rise to various new branches in science. AI,
blockchain
Suggestion
block chain
, nanotechnology etc.
are
Suggestion
Are
 some of the new areas
were
In or at or to what place
where
 there is a huge demand for highly skilled workers. There is
also
 a widespread belief that, compensation for jobs in the technology sector are much better compared to other white collar jobs.
This
 has resulted in a situation,
were
In or at or to what place
where
 students are picking up technical courses rather than focusing on their interest areas. It is a well know fact that, out of the three hundred thousand engineers who
passout
Suggestion
pass out
 each year from engineering colleges in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
, only 10%
is
Suggestion
are
 employable.
This
 is predominantly
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 many of our students take up engineering as a course, due to pressure from parents or in hopes of getting a
lucritive
producing a sizeable profit
lucrative
 job. But there is a shift in
this
 mentality, students
nowadays have
Suggestion
nowadays has
 a clear idea about the career they want to
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
peruse
 and are only taking up courses which of their interest. In conclusion, I believe its important that, we educate our student on various career option and let them decide the courses they want to take up at the University
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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