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In many countries, there is a push to get as many young people going to university as possible. To what extent do you think this effort is a worthwhile one? Do you think some people can benefit from not going to university? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent times there was a constant increase in people attending university due to the insistence of elders who see it as a way to achieve more prestigious jobs. It is true that having an education gives many benefits to people, not only to achieve better jobs, but
also
 to open the minds of youngs, to understand better our society, economy and history. Anyway, I don't think that pushing young people to a higher level of education can be beneficial. In fact we have more and more inadequate people do
imporant
of great significance or value
important
 jobs, and I think that part of the problem is because there are too many people who have the same qualifications, but not the same abilities.
Furthermore
,
university
Suggestion
the university
 is a great cost, and even if there are scholarships for poorer people the government has increasing difficulties to help all the people in need, and many families are not able to afford the price, so young people are put under a lot of pressure from their parents to accomplish something that they have never wanted. In Italy, we
also
 see an increase in the number of people who attend high school that are oriented to university. From my experience many students in
this
 type of school are not meant to be there, because they lack the ability and/or the mindset to go there, but due to the pressure of the family, they attend
this
 type of schools achieving bad grades, resulting in frustrated students and
,
Accept space
,
 in many cases, diminishing the quality of teaching. In conclusion, I think that the most important thing is to allow young people to follow their talents, and understanding
that is
 better having
an
Suggestion
a
 humble job which brings satisfaction, than a frustrating prestigious one.

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