To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at schools. How true is this statement ? Whose responsibility to provide food for school children ?

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Healthy children can be successful learners at
school
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although
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it depends on the meal which is provided from
school
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.
Personally I
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Personally, I
totally agree with
this
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statement and
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
believes
the whole society should become responsible for
this
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issue.
First
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of all, the
school
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meal is crucial for
childrens
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children's
children
health, a growth and study. If children do not have
meal
Suggestion
a meal
meals
during their break time they
mey
expresses possibility
may
feel hungry in turn they cannot concentrate on their lessons.
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addition providing
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addition, providing
well balanced and nutritious food helps to support their immune system and support their growth. The recent survey conducted by NHK reported that a bottle of milk or yogurt is included the
childrens
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children's
children
meal at Japanese schools for two decades.
As a result
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, modern Japanese teenagers has been maturing very quickly and their height has been increased noticeably compared to the past teenagers.
Consequently
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, the majority of
child
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children
have became
Suggestion
have become
more confident with their physical condition and their study.
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, all parts of society
such
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as government,
school
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authoritis
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
authorities
as well as parents should be fully concerned with the
school
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meal supply for children.
decision
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Decision
makers of the country have to standardize the
school
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meal ingredients very well, which has to be strictly followed by food suppliers.
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Also parents
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Also, parents
can monitor the
school
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meal.
However
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, parents should not rely on the meal provided from
school
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they
also
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have to consider what their children should eat at home.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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