The percentage of overweight children in western countries has increased by 20% in last 20 years. Discuss the causes and effects of disturbing trend.

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Fully explain your ideas

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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

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