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These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened. What are the effects of this change in attitude?

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My mother's generation had many skills that young people lack today.In the past people could mend clothes
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sew on buttons & fix a broken tap
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but
this
 is not true of current generations who tend to replace rather than repair.
This
 essay will discuss why these changes have
occured
come to pass
occurred
 and what effects
this
 is having. Today
,
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,
fasion
how something is done or how it happens
fashion
 changes quickly, but in the past it changed slowly.Clothing and furnitures
for
example would
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example, would
last
 for many years
;
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even generations.
However
,
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these days with pervasive advertising and communication via social media
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information about new items travels quickly and we tend to throw out the old to buy the new.Another reason that
fasions
how something is done or how it happens
fashions
change
 is that manufacturers are motivated to make goods that don't
last
 very long.
For
example cars
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example, cars
 today are built to
last
 5 to 10 years, whereas in the past cars would
last
 much longer. By having early obsolescence manufacturers can sell more goods.
This
change
 in attitude has
deskilled
remove impurities from, increase the concentration of, and separate through the process of distillation
distilled
 the public and is damaging our environment. We have lost both the skills and the will to maintain our possessions. Another
change
 is that we now create more negative environmental impact because many of the goods we buy and throw out are not biodegradable. We have become a generation of consumers and we are damaging the environment.
This
 is a huge
change
 from the past. In conclusion, today with him to buy a new
items
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item
 rather than repair older possessions. In the process most of us have lost the skills and the desire to repair older items and a
further
 consequence is that we are damaging our environment due to excess waste products.
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