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Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some people think that people can be encouraged to live healthy lives through sporting events such as Olympics or World Cups. Others think that there are better ways to encourage adults to do exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Majority
Suggestion
The majority
 of people nowadays are leading a sedentary lifestyle. Due to the hectic lifestyle, adults do not indulge in physical activities. Few believe that in order to motivate people for exercising is through various sporting events like the Olympics or World Cup, while few people opine
otherwise
.
This
 essay will discuss both the views with examples.
Firstly
, people are leading an inactive life due to a plethora of reasons like chaotic
work
 schedule or personal commitments. Working professionals on average spend 9 hours a day
work
 and due to the tight
work
 schedule they have very little motivation to spend another hour in
gym
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the gym
. To illustrate
further
, recent research by Hindustan Times states that 80% of working professionals have
a
Suggestion
an
 erratic
work
 schedule and after
long day
Suggestion
a long day
 nothing motivates them to
exercise
.
Furthermore
, research
also
 states that sporting activities like Olympics or World cup are viewed as pure entertainment,
hence
 there are very people who get inspiration
by
Suggestion
from
 the athletes to
exercise
 daily.
On the other hand
, I believe that there are better ways to motivate people for physical
exercise
 like the government can motivate people by running various campaigns for healthy lifestyle and the benefits of it.
For example
, India Prime Minister Mr. Narendra Modi launches “Fit India Campaign” where he
personally encourages
Suggestion
has personally encouraged
 the people of
country
Suggestion
the country
a country
 to stay healthy and fit by doing regular
exercise
. In that campaign he shared his video of doing yoga on a daily basis. Statistic shows that many people got motivated after seeing the prime minister video and have started doing any kind of physical activity. Alternatively, even
corporates
 can motivate their employees to stay healthy by providing subside gymnasium memberships or provide
exercise
 facilities in their offices.
This
 will encourage people to
work
 out on a regular basis. To recapitulate, staying fit and to
exercise
 on a regular basis requires
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of discipline and motivation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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