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The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary background. Why do you think people are interested in the lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good thing

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Celebrities who have ordinary
background
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, nowadays, becoming the centre of attention of
media
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the media
 and more eminent among
public
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the public
 due to
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a plethora
 of reasons. I think it has more positive impacts on people as compared to negative ones.
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 with, many people follow famous people because they get motivation from their lives
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as ample of well-known individuals have impoverished
background
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,
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,
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however due
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however, due
 to their hard work they achieved their goals
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when it reveals on media many individuals get encouragement and follow them. As
instance
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an instance
, Abraham
lincoln
16th President of the United States; saved the Union during the American Civil War and emancipated the slaves; was assassinated by Booth (1809-1865)
Lincoln
, belongs to destitute
background
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, yet due to his hard work he became the 16th president of US,
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 many pupils get inspiration from his biography. It is a good approach to be interested in the lives of renowned people because beings can achieve success by following their way of
live
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life
 and their hard-work. On the other
side it
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side, it
 can put negative impact if role models have any violent
background
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. To conclude, there are multifarious reasons to be interested in the lives of celebrities having ordinary
background
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 and the effect depends on the choice of people and media to be the followers of them.

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