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The best way to deal with the rising problem of traffic and transportation is to encourage people to live in cities rather than in the suburbs or in the countryside. To what extent do you agree?

#traffic #transportation #people #cities #suburbs #countryside
Inspiring
of
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citizens to replace their accommodation from
outskirts
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 to
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center
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because of
growth
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the growth
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 of
such
 issues as gridlock and transporting is assumed to be an excellent approach to carry out. There is some debate about whether
this
 method is for the best. A lot of
people
 believe that
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 permanent
residence
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residences
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 from
village
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the village
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 to
city
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the city
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centre
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center
 can help to decrease problems with traffic jams and
transit
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the transit
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 of passengers. The main reason for
this
 opinion is that there will be
less
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fewer
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 cars travelling into and out of a
city
 and the amount of petrol
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 for transportation will
also
be decreased
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.
For example
, in our
city
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city,
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 the problem of influx on the roads and shipping at all has been solved after five thousand
of
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people
 got new workplaces in the
city
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centre
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center
.
This
 significantly reduced the problems of traffic and transporting of
people
. It is undoubtedly a working and well-functioning method.
However
,
appearance
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the appearance
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 of a great number of autos in the
city
 has its own drawbacks. With
increasing
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the increasing
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 of citizens, the
city
 will need additional vehicles and routes.
Also
,
traffic
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the traffic
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 congestion problem will remain in the
city
center
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 and will demand added avenues. In
this
 regard buying new buses and constructing
of
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new roads
municipality
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municipalities
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 will have to spend a lot of
state's
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the state's
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 money. It can lead to huge expenses and
recession
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a recession
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 of
economy
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the economy
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 in future. In conclusion,
although
involvement
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the involvement
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 of
people
 in living in cities
instead
 of environs in order to decrease the problem of hard movement
is seemed
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 to be very attractive, the rationality of
such
method
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 is still in question. I personally believe that the challenge for
population
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the population
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 is to find the right balance between the two.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban sprawl
  • public transport infrastructure
  • commutes
  • residential density
  • ecological footprint
  • overcrowding
  • urban planning
  • car-sharing
  • traffic management
  • rural preservation
  • transportation policies
  • electric vehicles
  • sustainable living
  • incentivize
  • telecommuting
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