It is compulsory for children to attend school between the age of 5 and 16,Many people are in favour of raising the age at which children must start their schooling to 6 or 7,and the age at which they are allowed their parents while the teenagers would gain more from staying in school longer

Education
plays a crucial role in
individual's life
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an individual's life
the individual's life
and it is compulsory for children to start their schooling at the
age
of 5 and 16
,
Accept space
,
because it is the right
time
to lay a good foundation of
education
and shop allowing at 17 or 18, child as they lose their interest in their studies and they attach
with
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to
their parents badly
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
they stay at home for a long
time
. I believe that beginning study in
eariler
earlier in time; previously
earlier
age
is directly or indirectly beneficial for today's generation. These days beginning
education
in
eariler
earlier in time; previously
earlier
age
is very important for teenagers. In earlier
age
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ages
, children have
very sharp mind
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a very sharp mind
to grasp the new things very easily which will help
to
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with
large lay a good foundation of
education
.
Moveover
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Move over
, interaction with peers and teachers on
daily basis
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a daily basis
their communication skills will be improved
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
they will communicate with Fluency at
early
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an early age
age
. Apart from
this
, they learn social skills and leadership qualities which will make them better decision makers.
For instance
, In Western countries children start their
education
in very at the
age
of 17 or 18 and
also
enjoy their success.
On the other hand
, some people are in favour of raising the ages
to
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of
6 or 7
,
Accept space
,
they believe that children should spend their maximum
time
with their parents rather than school because they
thing
an instance of deliberate thinking
think
if children will go to school in
eariler
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an earlier age
earlier age
earlier ages
age
, they will learn only other cultures and away from own culture and they do not want to put
burden
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the burden
a burden
of study on them in early
age
.
For example
, In many villages still parents do not allow the children to go to school in
earlier
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an earlier age
earlier ages
age
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
they think their children still very young for
education
on
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at
in
the
age
of 10 In my opinion, children should start their
education
on right
time
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
if they stay at home for
longer
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a longer time
time
will get more
attach
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attached
with
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to
their parents and get more lazy.
Moreover
, they will not settle as well.

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