In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays
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in
uk
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the UK
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, it is not surprising that when people become old it is often common that they have to share
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of them or themselves
their
life with
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any of various alternatives; some other
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elderly aged persons in old age houses where home nurses would take
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of them. In case of
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experiencing
it is considered by many that
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the government
should pay,
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
completely disagree with
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statement and
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I
believe
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the family
is the one to take
care
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of senior citizens. There are numerous reasons to say that old age people are
nartured
help develop, help grow
nurtured
by their children's.
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Firstly when
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Firstly, when
these people were young, they
nartured
help develop, help grow
nurtured
matured
their children's. In
fact they
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fact, they
tried to full fill dreams of their children's.
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words they
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words, they
were the breadwinner of
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of them or themselves
their
family they
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family, they
earned to keep them comfortable.
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a recent survey conducted by family health and welfare shows that
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an
average Person
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spends
approximately 70 percentage from his monthly wages for daily living
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with
family.
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Therefore eventually
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Therefore, eventually
it is a responsibility of
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thier
of them or themselves
their
children's to pay expenses of parents when they are old. Another reason is to say that when they are coming to pay it would be a good opportunity to meet each other and to evaluate the
care
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their parents are receiving.
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, obviously old people are certainly craving for love and affection from their children's and grand children's so
this
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would be a great chance to meet all together.
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Furthermore elderly
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Furthermore, elderly
persons die hard to secure
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thier
of them or themselves
their
children's
future so
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future, so
directly it is a duty of
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thier
of them or themselves
their
family to pay for expenses. To conclude, many
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think
that government should settle for old age house cost while
i
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I
think that adult children's are more responsible to take
care
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of
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thier
of them or themselves
their
parents.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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