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In major cities around the world, traffic congestion has become a serious problem. How can this problem be tackled? Give reasons and examples from your own experience

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People have differed regarding whether mobile phones should be banned in public place or not. Those who support the ban argue that by doing
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 our public places become more safe and secure. Especially during the time of emergency, it would help both the police and medical personnels to locate the victim, when they call, as
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 phone can be easily traced by the assistance of GPS.
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, currently, public telephone booths are on the verge of extinction.
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 small piece of equipment is considered as multitasking device, which can do many jobs at a time.
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 helps the people to carry a single device in the place of many gadgets. Opponents of the above arguments point out that
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mobile phones can be used to take pictures and videos, it might be considered as an intrusion of others privacy.
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, when using these in the places: hospitals, airports and diagnostic centres, sensitive instruments get malfunctioned. If in the case of emergency, there are many public booths are available for the common people that can be used.
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, people get easily distracted from when others talking on the phones, which can lead to road accidents, lack of concentration in works, which means people’s life may
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 in a dangerous situation until cell phone are prohibited in the public places.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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