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It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media rich society.

#influence #media #lives #society
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The two maps compare developments of a city from 1995 to today, over a 25 year period of time. Overall, what stands out from the diagram is that the city has been modernised since 1995 with different sports facilities. Focusing on the east part of the city, in 1995, the northeast part of
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 a tennis court is built. A hotel, which remained same throughout the duration, but a new car park is erupted building. There were fishing port and market in 1995 on the shore of the sea, the former was completely demolished and the latter was replaced by apartments. The only area which remained relatively stable is west part, with some new houses.
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, there is a road which lay from west to east, had shops just opposite to fish market, in 1995, which are turned into restaurant
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