Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Evidently, some workers around the globe are concerned about paying
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taxes
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TAXES) for the money they earn and assert that
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levy should be avoided. In my opinion, it is essential to pay
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tax
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due to following reasons.
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of all, everyone receives many benefits for paying a part of their
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detail, governments use
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revenue to develop and maintain infrastructures and many services, which is inevitable for a good (BETTER) life in the society.
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not only includes the
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ESSENTIAL) services
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as a state-of-the-art
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health care
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educational institutions, supply of running water and electricity, but
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includes facilities for leisure
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as parks, stadiums, and so on.
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paying a proportion salary
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for
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, governing bodies need to spend a huge amount of money to ensure an effective law and order as well as a strong defence force in the country. Nowadays, almost all countries spend millions of dollars to modernize the police force
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which, in turn, reduce the crime in the societies.
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a lion share of revenue use to upgrade the defence forces to avoid attacks from enemy nations.
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, peaceful life of people are being disturbed while governments compromise in
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reiterates
the importance of paying
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. In conclusion, though a few people rose
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RAISE) a concern about paying
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tax
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taxes
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income
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, it is inevitable as
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revenue
income
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is essential for the governments to build infrastructures
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provide
essentials
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essential
services and to maintain police as well as army forces to keep peace in the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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