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Q. Some people think planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Should we grow trees or build housing complex is the vexed question which baffle everyone.Many suggested that we should plant more trees than to construct
new building
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a new building
 in order to improve the quality of
environment
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the environment
 and reduce air
pollution
.I completely agree with
this
 notion and in
this
 essay I will present my views with examples.
Firstly
, creating more green space in towns has enormous benefits not only
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
purify
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pure
 air
,
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,
which reduces air
pollution
 generated by vehicles and construction sites, it
also help
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also helps
has also helped
 to
reduces
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reduce
 noise
pollution
 thanks to leave's capacity to distribute sound.
Hence
, generally, by increasing new plants in urban areas we can improve our living environment greatly. The biggest example of
this
 is
capital city
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the capital city
 of
India where
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India, where
 recent survey conducted by
pollution
 control board
,
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,
Delhi
indicate
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Indicate
 that by planting
new plant
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new plants
a new plant
 near metro
stations government
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stations, government
 able to reduce
pollution
 by 10%.
Secondly
,
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,
planting trees will be essential for local residents who live there and animals as it could provide
shelters
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shelter
 and habitats
to
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for
 them. The clusters of trees home of
variety
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a variety
 of birds and attract migrating birds during season time which rapture surrounding area.
Moreover
, human-being could have
numurous
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
 health benefits
by
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of
 getting access to more green areas
such
 as park and playgrounds.The study shows, people who live near the green resources in the city,
may
the month following April and preceding June
May
 have a longer life expectancy than those not
liver
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lived
 near the green. To sum up, planting trees in urban areas will help us to reduce
pollution
 and improve
environment
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an environment
 which is very important.
Also
, by creating new green spaces we are providing
pleasent
affording pleasure; being in harmony with your taste or likings
pleasant
 surrounding and taking health benefits of nature. In my view, planting trees in big cities are very essential to improve human life style.

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