In some countries university students live away from home and in another cities wile study. Do you think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages of living in another cities?
In today's global world,
Education
is the most momentous thing in an individual life. Most precious years of our life have been spent in getting education
. To reap the benefits of it some students prefer to study in different cities far from Add an article
an education
home
, while
others get an education
from the neighbourhood. In my opinion
the advantages of studying away from the family are Add a comma
opinion,
dominating
than its negatives.
In today's Correct quantifier usage
more dominating
fast growing
Add a hyphen
fast-growing
cities
many Add a comma
cities,
skills
for living needs
to be learned from the present sprouting generation. Correct subject-verb agreement
need
Get
Wrong verb form
Getting
education
distant from Correct article usage
an education
home
gives the
opportunity to learn Correct pronoun usage
me the
such
skills
. For instance
, money and time management, cooking, cleaning and how all these things can be managed with our daily studies when the responsible person
is far-away
. Correct your spelling
far away
Such
skills
in overall
development. Another important domain for getting an education
near to
the university is the surrounding atmosphere, which is full of other pupils helps to encourage for to do the hard work. Other than that the opportunities of mixing with people from different Change preposition
apply
background
give the chance to develop maturity and several qualities or Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
skills
also
can be learned from this
, which leads towards a successful life. However
, living away from home
can be emotionally depressing for some students, as a consequence
, they are not able to concentrate on study.
On the other hand
, studying in homeland
can be helpful in saving money Add an article
the homeland
due to
dorms and hostels could be more expensive. Moreover
, older person
or Fix the agreement mistake
people
caretaker
in Fix the agreement mistake
caretakers
surroundings
can be favouring Correct pronoun usage
their surroundings
while
studying, which helps to
concentrate more on Correct pronoun usage
them to
study
rather than other responsibilities. Wrong verb form
studying
In
contrast
disturbing Add a comma
contrast,
neighbourhood
and siblings can be injurious Fix the agreement mistake
neighbourhoods
while
learning. In addition
, the shadow of a responsible person
in Correct article usage
the surrounding
surrounding
could prevent a Replace the word
surroundings
person
from self development
and maturity.
To recapitulate, Add a hyphen
self-development
although
the disadvantages such
as emotional breakdown, the advantages of independence and self development
are more significant. Add a hyphen
self-development
According to
the above argument, I can be agreed
that Wrong verb form
agree
advantages
of studying far from Correct article usage
the advantages
home
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task response
You have addressed the prompt and provided a clear opinion. Ensure that the supporting ideas and examples are well-developed and relevant to the topic.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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